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Sunset - Chapter 1: Dawn    A dark and stormy night: the perfect time to tamper with the universe's laws. Or so Celestia thought to herself. She couldn't explain why, despite her long years, but something just felt... right... about the whole thing. Maybe years of loneliness had finally driven her off the deep end? No, she was still quite sane. It wasn't like she was totally alone either. Sure, she had grovelling servants at her beck and call, but they were always far too formal for her tastes.

  "Dear sister," Her Royal Highness, Princess Celestia of Equestria, Regent of the Sun spoke to a dusty old painting on the wall. "In twenty sh
Sunset Sequel Teaser"Today is naught but the culmination of events of the day before, and the day before that, stretching back to the beginning of all things. But make no mistake; one can still change the course of the future. All it takes is one single choice."

- His Royal Highness, King Genesis, exalted creator of Sun and Ponykind, ruler of the day.

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"Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery. But today is a gift: that is why they call it 'the present'"

– Her Royal Highness, Queen Rachana, exalted creator of Earth and Moon, ruler of the night.

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Soft, sad music[1] plays during the two quotes, echoing in the velvet darkness they leave behind.
Spyra, part oneTwilight Sparkle slowly climbed the winding staircase, casting frequent nervous glances behind her to check whether she was being followed.

Canterlot was always busy no matter what time of day it was, but right now the only activity within the castle would be the royal guards on their nightly duties. It was 2am and the young unicorn had had one hell of a day, but this was the only moment when she had felt something approaching fear.

Actually, fear wasn't the correct word – anxiety was a better term. If she failed in her mission here, then she was certain that Princess Celestia would be disappointed with her. The alicorn had been her tu
Fireball! - 1 of 5"One does not care to acknowledge the mistakes of one's youth."
- Char Aznable, Mobile Suit Gundam

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Several Years After The Defeat Of Nightmare Moon...
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The Final Frontier
(Filled With Infinite Magical Energy)

"Space... is... awesome."

Twilight Sparkle's smile was nearly as huge as the celestial body she'd just managed to teleport herself to. Barely able to contain her giddiness, she levitated her communicator out of her saddle bag and spoke into it.

"Mission Control, this is Sparkle One, do you copy? Over."

Some time passed before the communicator crackled to life, and a reply was heard. "Huh? Twilight, is that you? What's a
Fillystata 1: Antecedent
Prologue
"The Great and Powerful Trixie presents, live at the main stage of the Royal Pony Theater of Canterlot: The Fillystata - a magical puppet show! One time only! Come one, come all, and witness the story of the century!"

Ponies from all over Equestria trickle into the grand hall of the old, prestigious theater. A veritable buzzing of eager voices sends trembling echoes through the room as everypony settles in front of the large stage. As the lights dim, all voice fades to silence. Anticipation rises until finally the curtains part, and a lone unicorn in a purple cape and pointy hat steps out upon the floor in front of the audience. Ba
Sunset - Chapter 4: EclipseDeep in the heart of the Everfree Forest, maybe less than half a mile from the rotting castle at its heart, sat a large pond that sparkled in the noon-time sun. Creatures of all sizes and shapes idled by the cool water that day, the oppressive heat at its height.

A low roar sounded from above the pond, compelling the creatures to look towards the sky at the incoming threat. Birds took flight as the animals on the ground ran away, almost as if they could sense the torrent of distress coming their way. The roar became steadily louder, a purple point on the horizon growing in size and ferocity. Any creature that had not fled by then sealed its
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The first chapter of my My Little Pony alternate history fan fic, The Son of the Emperor. Taken from the Equestria Daily description:

"We all know about stories where Humans enter Equestria. But what about a world where Equestria is in the Human world? It is the year 1820, and a series of events brings a young unicorn and a human prince together. Together, they will embark on a quest to change Europe, and the world, forever."

Any comments or criticisms are welcomed (So long as you aren't a dick at least).

Chapter 2: [link]?
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~firelord-zuko Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm no brony and know absolutely nothing about MLP. But I know the more about the history, so here we go.

First of all, this is exceptionally well-written. The German (and, as far as I can tell), is well-researched, though I suppose Franz would address the emperor more politely. It was, after all, customary for close friends and family to address each other using "Sie" instead of "du". Nevertheless, there are no real mistakes. Your style is dynamic, vivid, yet lyrical. Characterisation is working well and smooth.

A bit on accuracy. Firstly, I disapprove of images in stories, but never mind. In any case, you used the lesser arms of the German Empire, which would not even exist until 1871 and not used in this form into the 1880s. In the period in question, the Prussian Eagle was simply this: [link] The Hohenzollern shield (Quarterly Argent and Sable) was not a part of the lesser arms at all, and only included in the inescutcheon for the Burggraviate of Nuremburg in the greater arms.
Your descriptions of the clothes your characters wear also seem not quite period-appropriate. Refer to Wikipedia's excellent series on Western fashion, in particularly the article on "1795-1820 in Fashion". Considering that this is Vienna, a centre of European fashion, the succeeding article might already be appropriate.
Fun fact: in 1820, the Hoch- und Deutschmeister of the Teutonic Knights was Archduke Anton Victor, the viceroy of Lombardo-Venetia, who is Napoleon II's ... great-uncle?

Also, you're a Paradoxian? High five!
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~NoMoreSanity Dec 17, 2012
Well, this was a sudden and altogether unexpected reply. I'll look into fixing that stuff before the day is over, thank you for pointing it all out. Tell me though, did you come by this on your own, or through some other way? I'm not sure how you'd know of it if you don't know about MLP.
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~firelord-zuko Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I read about it on TV Tropes, ages ago. Don't know the context any more, probably something involving Napoleon or historical tropes. I only just sought for it again (because it's a more effective way of avoiding to research the Battle of Salamanca for my own fanfiction than playing game after game of Windows 8 Minesweeper) and am glad I did.
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~NoMoreSanity Dec 17, 2012
Well I'm glad you're enjoying what little there is to the story, and I hope I can get those changes in by the end of the day. I always like to fix what the readers point out.
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Mood: b0x0rz-less ~DPV111 Dec 24, 2011
Hey, you're on DA too? Kewl I just wanted to say that-
"Any comments or criticisms are welcomed (So long as you aren't a dick at least)."
Oh, well then. *Leaves*.
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~Jin-Ghi-Lives Dec 23, 2011
you sir have my attention.
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~NoMoreSanity Dec 23, 2011
You do as well, person who looks like a total boss.
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~bronyfan Dec 23, 2011
man i was hoping he was from the fatherland no makes any good deustch stories
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!MaximillianVeers Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I read the first chapter when this was posted to ED... I wasn't expecting much, and was pleasantly surprised at how bloody amazing it was. :) Looking forward to more!
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~NoMoreSanity Oct 7, 2011
Glad to see you enjoyed it. Can't wait to see your opinion on future chapters.
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